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Poison
Age : 15
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 |  Subject: ~Fate~  Sat Aug 30, 2008 11:38 am | |
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Fate
The air swirled, the world spun around, cries and laughter’s swam everywhere. ‘This is the end…the end of a life made by hell itself, oh how long I’ve been waiting for this’ she muttered, grinning. Her life had felt as if it had gone on for ages, although she was only 14. It was a terrible life, filled with ambitions, clouded by jealousy, no friends, and no family, loneliness dominated over her. Memories hurtled past, spinning endlessly, until she could no longer take it. Her mind began to dissolve, happiness was now inside her, happy to leave the miserable life she had, hoping to be born in a new body, in a new world.
This is a very short story i wrote, for some competition. Please don't post saying you hate grunge and i'm an emo and bla bla bla. I'm not, it's just i had a limit in words and tried to make it as 'powerful' as i could =] Hope you enjoy it
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Scotland
Age : 14
Joined : 28 Nov 2007
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| | Subject: Re: ~Fate~ Sat Aug 30, 2008 11:43 am | |
| It's good... but i woldn't have added. "happiness was now inside her".
That doesn't really work. It's good though.
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| | Subject: Re: ~Fate~ Sat Aug 30, 2008 2:08 pm | |
| | i liiikkeeee |
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Age : 14
Joined : 23 Nov 2007
Posts : 2288
Location : ωιтн му тє∂∂у вєαr
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| | Subject: Re: ~Fate~ Fri Sep 05, 2008 12:22 pm | |
| it's really good.. even though its short.. buh i like the way you have used powerful words..by any chance.. do you want to be like an author when you leave school or something to do with writing?.. just asking.. because you're pretty good at that kinda thing..
so.. did yhoo win the competition in the end .. well hope yhoo did x
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Santa Clause
Age : 14
Joined : 22 Jul 2008
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| | Subject: Re: ~Fate~ Fri Sep 05, 2008 6:52 pm | |
| Man, that was awesome Poison
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Spook-Loop
Age : 13
Joined : 04 Feb 2008
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| | Subject: Re: ~Fate~ Fri Sep 05, 2008 7:45 pm | |
| that was cool!
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Steff
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Age : 11
Joined : 13 Aug 2008
Posts : 1793
Location : Drinking Pie :)
Hobbies : Eating pie...happy?
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| | Subject: Re: ~Fate~ Fri Sep 05, 2008 10:16 pm | |
| Thats a really good story. You should seriously think about becoming an author and selling books.
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Scotland
Age : 14
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| | Subject: Re: ~Fate~ Fri Sep 05, 2008 10:35 pm | |
| How much money would you make???
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Poison
Age : 15
Joined : 01 Dec 2007
Posts : 1761
Location : Over There
Hobbies : CP Stinks - Runescape name: Chipperrrr/Sc1m Impact
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| | Subject: Re: ~Fate~ Tue Sep 23, 2008 3:20 pm | |
| lol thanks guys, i stink at english in school, i'm not planning to be an author 
i didn't win the competition, i had very very very good competitors against me
but i had fun making it 
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