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Poison
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 |  Subject: .:Fear ~ The Lost Possession:.  Sun Feb 10, 2008 9:31 am | |
| Fear ~ The Lost PossessionWritten And Made Up By Pingu Chippa/Poison (Avenged Sevenfold Logo Used For Image)Please comment on your opinions, also, if you can, please give me some advice/improvements.
I have made the Summary in a spoiler, for those of you who like to find out more as you read along, instead of reading the Blurb first.
Positive Comments:
| dobbeh wrote: | Cewl I Like Books Written By 'Ordianry' People  |
| Xkavx wrote: | | nice i like well done woo for chippa =P kav xxx |
| Lemon-nator wrote: | | Nice story Chippa. |
| StillRemains wrote: | | Awsome! WOO!!!! Go CHIPPA! |
| dobbeh wrote: | | Woo The First Chapter PWN's!!!! |
| Brad wrote: | Yeah
i used to like storys like this
so i like this one
gooo chippa  |
| Badger wrote: | | Cool! I cant wait to read it! |
| dobbeh wrote: | | Same...It'll be Cewlio |
| --Kelly_<3 wrote: | Woahh! Well Done Chippa! hehe yhoo should be an author =P
Its really good.. like awesome.. and makes yhoo want to keep reading.. now i want to know what happens next!!! Arghh 'trying to be patient' LOL >.<
even though i dont read books about 'death and evil etc..' buh your story is actually brilliant =) Keep it up and i cant wait till the second chapter WOOh!! =) |
| Brad wrote: | | Lol yeah its gr8 |
| Snowball wrote: | | Cool, now Kelly made it a subforum. i can't wait to see the next chapter, this is really a good story. |
| Scotland wrote: |  It's like a new creative side to Chippa |
| --Kelly_<3 wrote: | | haha LOL.. yeahh he should be an author.. =P He would be so good..=) |
| dobbeh wrote: | Lol He's Only 14
Already an Author |
| --Kelly_<3 wrote: | | yeahh start early.. then you'll be famous at the age about 20 .. wouldnt that be cool.. everyone reading your story? LOL |
| --Kelly_<3 wrote: | | awwh,,, its on a cliff hanger.. arghh who's voice was that at the end? Chippa cant you like tell me what happens next please.. hehe >.< |
| Snowball wrote: | | Wow, I like the second chapter. |
| StillRemains wrote: | | Second Chapter PWNZ! |
| dobbeh wrote: | | Woahh...Teh Second Chapter Is Cewl |
| Red Tomatto wrote: | | publish, publish. publish the book |
| Scotland wrote: | | You should make it into a book |
| dobbeh wrote: | Yeahh He just needs someone to publish it
Woo Can't wait for chapter 3 |
| StillRemains wrote: | *calls printing press* *gets nervous* *Hangs up*
sorry chippa i just cant do it...your on your own with the publishing |
| vincentppgcp wrote: | | Not creepy but great story! |
| --lizzie-- wrote: | Wikidd story chippa hunzii..i dont read alot =P..buh i found it wikidd =)
xx LiZziiee_x |
| --lizzie-- wrote: | Wikidd can't wait 2 read it =D..Scary lol i wudnt normally read stuff lyke that buh now im rly into it
**LiZziiee_x__X** |
| Smarteh wrote: | | Wicked Chippa! The Story Pwns So Far... |
| Yoosof wrote: | Woah!
Nice story PC! |
| Weeblerjake wrote: | | Yeah, the story rules! I wait for the next chapter! |
| Sportsdude90 wrote: | | Wow nice story i'll go on to chapter 3 |
| w00t932 wrote: | | the story rules so far,GREAT JOB!!! |
| Smarteh wrote: | | YES! Death Returns XD. Great Lightning Adjectives. I Could Picture Everything! |
| dobbeh wrote: | Wow...Very Nice Chippa  |
| Badger wrote: | | OMG! Thats awesome Chippa! Nice Work! |
| dobbeh wrote: | | Wooo Can't Wait |
| --Kelly_<3 wrote: | Woahh PinguChippa your story is getting really good. Keep it up =)
Cant wait for the 5th chapter xD |
| StillRemains wrote: | | Awsome!!!! get typing now! i want chapter 6 NOW! dont make me take off my pants! |
| dobbeh wrote: | Ohhh I like it
It's Action Packed = Good  |
| dobbeh wrote: | | It's very clever |
| Smarteh wrote: | | That Chapter 5 Was Actually Really Good. |
| dobbeh wrote: | | Yupp Can't wait till Chapter 6 |
| dobbeh wrote: | Woo...
Lovin' it
I like the description - Adjectives Etc. |
| macdaddy1234 wrote: | | well i do feel great yippe dee doo daw yay chippa! |
| Smarteh wrote: | | Oooh. Awesome! The Book Is So Going To Be Published Someday! Watch If It Doesnt. XD |
| Snowball wrote: | | Poison, you have a gift for writing |
| Snowball wrote: | | Whoah, the 7th chapter is the best so far Nice job Poison! |
| --Kelly_<3 wrote: | | kwool.. Chapter 7 is really good and i want to know what happens next >.< I cant wait to read chapter 8 xD Keep up the good work Chippa =) |
| Red Tomatto wrote: | | Yay Chippa! Thats a great story! u should get it published!!!!!!! |
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Summary (Click spoiler below):
| Spoiler: | | | Many many years ago, there was a City Of Evil. It was dark, and mysterious, many brave warriors tried to invade it, but got eliminated...by fear. So many secrets were spilt, but none the less, harder and harder to get to. There was one secret, only the darkest creatures alive knew of. But the darkest creatures were eliminated too, by Death. Death was a true evil spirit, constantly rising and rising into the most powerful emperors of the City. Death found a secret that was worth more than any living creature could imagine of...
This secret was inside a box, full of emotions and powerful souls... The Spiritual Box. It could only be opened by chanting dark ancient magic, taught in The City Of Evil. Death had once found a very helpful emotion...fear. He cleverly got past the remaining obstacles, and alas, the box shined upon him. But before he could even touch the box, it simply vanished into thin air.
From that moment, Death became unusually power-hungry, even though he had enough power that anyone could imagine of...
From that moment, Death set hunt for the box, and for many years, has been using his cleverness to track the box down, and knows where to find it. According to his logic, it is located in the deep earths underneath a Humongous City, the biggest City in the world... The City Of Realms. As Death entered this populated City, many human beings looked scared. Death used fear against any obstacles, and as usual, used his logic to find where this mysterious box lyed under. He had a vague idea... The Realms Cemetery. And from that point, many other strange living souls, like Death, were on a hunt to find the box... |
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I have finished the story, and i hope you enjoyed it =]
Last edited by Poison on Mon Jun 02, 2008 5:49 pm; edited 53 times in total |
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| | Subject: Re: .:Fear ~ The Lost Possession:. Sun Feb 10, 2008 9:53 am | |
| Cewl I Like Books Written By 'Ordianry' People
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| | Subject: Re: .:Fear ~ The Lost Possession:. Sun Feb 10, 2008 9:56 am | |
| lol i understand what you mean, but sometimes darkness can be a piece of beauty when it is used in stories and especially poems
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| | Subject: Re: .:Fear ~ The Lost Possession:. Sun Feb 10, 2008 10:01 am | |
| nice i like well done woo for chippa =P kav xxx
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| | Subject: Re: .:Fear ~ The Lost Possession:. Sun Feb 10, 2008 10:10 am | |
| Nice story Chippa.
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| | | | Poison
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| | Subject: Re: .:Fear ~ The Lost Possession:. Sun Feb 10, 2008 10:28 am | |
| lol thanks guys, but that's just a summary, i have my chapters coming out soon
EDIT: i have released the first chapter, check my first post, under the summary
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| | Subject: Re: .:Fear ~ The Lost Possession:. Sun Feb 10, 2008 2:53 pm | |
| | Awsome! WOO!!!! Go CHIPPA! |
| | | | Poison
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| | Subject: Re: .:Fear ~ The Lost Possession:. Sun Feb 10, 2008 2:58 pm | |
| lol thanks SR, i'm writing out each chapter on microsoft word, and i will read through each one again, and try and improve it. when i think it's the best i can do, i'll release it
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| | Subject: Re: .:Fear ~ The Lost Possession:. Sun Feb 10, 2008 3:17 pm | |
| Woo The First Chapter PWN's!!!!
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| | Subject: Re: .:Fear ~ The Lost Possession:. Sun Feb 10, 2008 3:25 pm | |
| lol thanks, i know it seems short, but it's just the opening scene
there's a lot more to come
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